Using SID to write descriptions
Strong verbs – these help to characterise events, settings and the people in your story. Note for example how the river ‘swallowed’ up the rain drops. What does this imply (make us guess) about the size and importance of the river…
Imagery helps to establish character and setting. The light rain of our story’s opening is ‘like a miracle’.
Details. These put flesh on the story and its characters. In the opening of Little Hatshepsut Ahmes confronts a rare rain and is by herself. She, we learn, is sad; the rain and being alone help confirm why she might be sad but we want to find out more. So the details are not all revealed at one time.